{"id":38150,"date":"2018-04-24T12:36:51","date_gmt":"2018-04-24T12:36:51","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/?p=38150"},"modified":"2018-04-24T12:37:25","modified_gmt":"2018-04-24T12:37:25","slug":"vasilica-grigoras-haiku-19","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/2018\/04\/24\/vasilica-grigoras-haiku-19\/","title":{"rendered":"Vasilica GRIGORA\u0218: Haiku"},"content":{"rendered":"<p style=\"text-align: center;\"><a href=\"http:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-content\/uploads\/2018\/04\/haiku2.jpg\"><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"size-medium wp-image-38151\" title=\"haiku\" src=\"http:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-content\/uploads\/2018\/04\/haiku2-300x225.jpg\" alt=\"\" width=\"300\" height=\"225\" srcset=\"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-content\/uploads\/2018\/04\/haiku2-300x225.jpg 300w, https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-content\/uploads\/2018\/04\/haiku2.jpg 960w\" sizes=\"auto, (max-width: 300px) 100vw, 300px\" \/><\/a><\/p>\n<p style=\"text-align: center;\">cire\u015fi \u00een floare \u2013<br \/>\nmama c\u0103r\u00e2nd stelele<br \/>\ncu cobili\u0163a<\/p>\n<p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><strong>Comentariu Corneliu Traian Atanasiu<\/strong>: Valoarea unui haiku este cu at\u00eet mai mare cu c\u00eet reu\u0219e\u0219te s\u0103 te transporte simultan \u0219i \u00eentr-o anume situa\u021bie real\u0103, \u0219i \u00eentr-o atmosfer\u0103 spiritual\u0103. E prim\u0103var\u0103 \u0219i toate treburile se accelereaz\u0103. Mama se scoal\u0103 \u00eenainte s\u0103 se lumineze \u0219i \u00een timp ce aduce ap\u0103 de la f\u00eent\u00een\u0103, \u00een g\u0103le\u021bile de pe cobili\u021b\u0103 se oglindesc \u00eenc\u0103 stelele. Zorul \u00eemprim\u0103v\u0103r\u0103rii face ca mama s\u0103 devin\u0103 un factor care pare s\u0103 intervin\u0103 \u0219i \u00een mai rapid\u0103 cre\u0219tere a zilei. Aduc\u00eend apa de la f\u00eent\u00een\u0103 ea evacueaz\u0103 \u0219i stelele nop\u021bii adormite \u00eenc\u0103 pe cer.<br \/>\nNu am l\u0103udat acest poem pentru c\u0103 are kigo (\u0219i are), nu l-am denigrat pentru c\u0103 e vorba \u00een el despre o mam\u0103. \u00cel laud pentru c\u0103 \u00eemi place \u0219i \u00een\u021beleg s\u0103 scot \u00een eviden\u021b\u0103 pentru ce \u00eel pre\u021buiesc ca s\u0103 sensibilizez \u0219i pe al\u021bii la ceea ce mi se pare valoros \u00een el. Mama este din p\u0103cate un cli\u0219eu, dar autorul \u00eel folose\u0219te f\u0103r\u0103 s\u0103 cedeze unor poncife facile, unor dulceg\u0103rii lacrimogene. \u0218tie s\u0103 nu cad\u0103 \u00een capacana lor \u0219i face din ea un fel de atlet cosmic care, cu h\u0103rnicia unei mame veritabile, vrea s\u0103 \u00eenv\u00eert\u0103 mai repede roata ruginit\u0103 care m\u0103re\u0219te cu prea mare \u00eencetineal\u0103 ziua. Ziua care acum este prea scurt\u0103 pentru c\u00eete are de f\u0103cut. Imaginea stelelor oglindite \u00een g\u0103le\u021bile duse de mam\u0103 pe cobili\u021b\u0103 este fabuloas\u0103 dac\u0103 accept\u0103m paradoxul: ea vrea s\u0103 scurteze noaptea, s\u0103 fac\u0103 ziu\u0103 mai devreme. \u00cen dorin\u021ba ei, apa e un fleac, ea car\u0103 stele pentru a sc\u0103pa de ele.<br \/>\n\u0218i pentru mine a l\u0103uda poemul spun\u00eend c\u0103 are kigo mi se pare o bagatel\u0103 fa\u021b\u0103 de a consemna faptul c\u0103 are paradox \u0219i \u00eemplete\u0219te realul muncii cotidiene cu fabulosul basmului.<br \/>\nA citi un haiku \u0219i a te pronun\u021ba asupra lui este o chestiune delicat\u0103. \u00cen primul r\u00eend nu po\u021bi proceda expeditiv \u0219i rudimentar ca \u0219i cum ai avea de tran\u0219at o evaluare urgent\u0103 sau un conflict sup\u0103r\u0103tor. Chestiunea e dificil\u0103 \u0219i ingrat\u0103 \u0219i \u00ee\u021bi impune s\u0103-\u021bi asumi o viziune generoas\u0103 \u0219i s\u0103 uzezi de mijloace rafinate.<br \/>\nC\u00eend a \u00eenceput s\u0103 m\u0103 preocupe haiku-ul, am observat suficien\u021ba satisf\u0103cut\u0103 cu care autorii mai vechi \u0219i mai vocali puneau \u0219tampile prin care validau sau invalidau poemele folosind formula r\u0103suflat\u0103 are\/n-are. F\u0103r\u0103 nicio alt\u0103 nuan\u021bare, poemele erau declarate haiku pentru c\u0103 aveau 5-7-5 silabe, kigo, kireji, c\u00eeteva valori cu nume (neap\u0103rat) japonez \u0219i erau repudiate pentru c\u0103 nu aveau aceste c\u00eeteva tr\u0103s\u0103turi. Nimeni nu avea vreo tres\u0103rire \u00een a remarca o nuan\u021b\u0103 a compozi\u021bei, a felului \u00een care s\u00eent puse fa\u021b\u0103-n fa\u021b\u0103 imaginile \u0219i se \u00eempletesc aluziile, a magiei prin care realitate banal\u0103 se torcea \u00een fire spirituale. Nimeni nu accepta c\u0103 a comenta un poem, l\u0103ud\u00eendu-l sau blam\u00eendu-l, \u00eenseamn\u0103 a avea capacitatea de a sesiza cu sensibilitate \u0219i subtilitate resorturile specifice ale acelui poem \u0219i nu ale tuturor. Nimeni nu avea r\u0103bdarea de a constata c\u0103 cele mai multe dintre poeme se afl\u0103 undeva \u00eentre cele care pot fi considerate sau nu haiku \u0219i c\u0103 acolo, \u00een acest interval larg, este locul cel mai prolific \u0219i mai valoros al schimb\u0103rilor care fac acest poem mai viabil \u0219i mai \u00eensufle\u021bit.<br \/>\nM\u0103 bucur c\u0103 autoarea a descris am\u0103nun\u021bit circumstan\u021bele intime ale faptelor de la care a plecat \u00een poem. Este clar c\u0103 ele s\u00eent surprinse \u00een poem, dar omisiunile \u0219i stilizarea expresiei fac ca un cititor care nu le cunoa\u0219te s\u0103 poat\u0103 da totu\u0219i poemului un \u00een\u021beles generos \u0219i profund. Acum, \u0219tiind de faptul c\u0103 apa era c\u0103rat\u0103 pentru udatul gr\u0103dinii, m\u0103 g\u00eendesc c\u0103 stelele oglindite \u00een ap\u0103 erau \u0219i ele un adaos ceresc care \u00eenlesnea cre\u0219terea r\u0103sadurilor \u0219i le direc\u021biona c\u0103tre \u00eenalt.<\/p>\n<p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><strong>Comentariu Vasilica Grigora\u015f<\/strong>: <em>Este o imagine, un tablou din copil\u0103rie. Privind prin ochii copilului este ceva feeric, idilic, privind prin ochii adultului, tr\u0103itor la \u021bar\u0103 \u0219i nevoit s\u0103 munceasc\u0103 din noapte \u00een noapte, via\u021ba are \u0219i aspecte nepl\u0103cute.<br \/>\nC\u00e2nd cire\u0219ii (cai\u0219ii, prunii\u2026) \u00eenfloreau, o preocupare a \u021b\u0103ranului era \u0219i \u00eengrijirea gr\u0103dinii de legume \u0219i zarzavaturi &#8211; s\u0103dit, pr\u0103\u0219it, udat\u2026 Nu aveam f\u00e2nt\u00e2n\u0103 l\u00e2ng\u0103 cas\u0103 \u0219i mama era nevoit\u0103 s\u0103 care ap\u0103 cu cobili\u021ba de la o f\u00e2nt\u00e2n\u0103 mai dep\u0103rtat\u0103. Pentru c\u0103 trebuia s\u0103 mearg\u0103 \u0219i la muncile c\u00e2mpului, udatul gr\u0103dinii se f\u0103cea dis-de-diminea\u021b\u0103, c\u00e2nd pe cer mai erau \u00eenc\u0103 stele, care treptat apuneau \u0219i r\u0103s\u0103rea soarele.<br \/>\nMama cu cobili\u021ba pe um\u0103r trecea pe l\u00e2ng\u0103 doi cire\u0219i din gr\u0103din\u0103. V\u00e2ntul adia u\u0219or, iar florile acestora, de acum \u00eencepeau a se scutura \u0219i c\u0103deau \u00een g\u0103le\u021bile pline cu ap\u0103. \u00centreb\u00e2nd-o pe mama unde se duc stelele de pe cer, mi-a spus at\u00e2t de simplu: \u201dIat\u0103-le \u00een g\u0103le\u021bi! Am cules c\u00e2teva, pe care s\u0103 le punem la r\u0103d\u0103cina ro\u0219iilor, ardeilor, vinetelor\u2026 ca s\u0103 creasc\u0103 mari \u0219i gustoase, iar voi s\u0103 le m\u00e2nca\u021bi \u0219i s\u0103 cre\u0219te\u021bi s\u0103n\u0103to\u0219i \u0219i frumo\u0219i\u201d. Mi-aduc foarte bine aminte acea diminea\u021b\u0103. Am admirat \u201dstelele\u201d din g\u0103leat\u0103 minute \u00een \u0219ir, luam cu grij\u0103 ap\u0103 \u0219i \u201dstele\u201d cu ulcica de lut \u0219i turnam la r\u0103d\u0103cina plantelor .<br \/>\nMult timp, prim\u0103vara urm\u0103ream mereu acest\u0103 imagine a \u201dstelelor\u201d aduse de mama cu cobili\u021ba. Era o splendoare s\u0103 le prive\u0219ti!!! Dar cu ce efort erau c\u0103rate?<br \/>\nMai t\u00e2rziu am observat c\u0103, merg\u00e2nd cu g\u0103le\u021bile pline cu ap\u0103 de la f\u00e2nt\u00e2n\u0103 p\u00e2n\u0103 \u00een gr\u0103din\u0103 \u0219i stelele cerului se b\u0103l\u0103ceau \u00een apa c\u0103rat\u0103 cu cobili\u021ba de biata mama, ca multe alte femei de la \u021bar\u0103. Domnul s\u0103 le odihneasc\u0103 \u00een lini\u0219te \u0219i pace!<br \/>\nPrimul vers &#8220;cire\u0219i \u00een floare&#8221; \u2013 exprim\u0103 frumuse\u021bea prim\u0103verii, a naturii pline de via\u021b\u0103, de culoare, de lumin\u0103\u2026<br \/>\nCelelalte dou\u0103 versuri, &#8220;mama c\u0103r\u00e2nd stelele\/ cu cobili\u0163a&#8221; creeaz\u0103, \u00een contrast cu imaginea optimist\u0103, plin\u0103 de speran\u021b\u0103\u2026 din primul plan, una trist\u0103, de munc\u0103 asidu\u0103, destul de \u00eempov\u0103r\u0103toare. Dar \u0219i \u021b\u0103ranii au stelele lor, \u0219i \u00een acest poem, acestea dau savoare, satisfac\u021bie vie\u021bii lucr\u0103torilor p\u0103m\u00e2ntului.<br \/>\n<\/em><br \/>\n&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8211;<\/p>\n<p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><strong>Vasilica GRIGORA\u0218<\/strong><\/p>\n<p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><strong>Vaslui<\/strong><\/p>\n<p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><strong>24 aprilie, 2018<\/strong><\/p>\n<p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><em>(Imagine internet)<\/em><\/p>\n<p style=\"text-align: justify;\"><strong>\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>cire\u015fi \u00een floare \u2013 mama c\u0103r\u00e2nd stelele cu cobili\u0163a Comentariu Corneliu Traian Atanasiu: Valoarea unui haiku este cu at\u00eet mai [&#038;hellip<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"closed","ping_status":"closed","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"footnotes":""},"categories":[3],"tags":[],"class_list":["post-38150","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-articole"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/38150","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=38150"}],"version-history":[{"count":3,"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/38150\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":38153,"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/38150\/revisions\/38153"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=38150"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=38150"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.marianagurza.ro\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=38150"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}